为自己加油

Correct or improve the translation of the following English sentences.原文：He walked Susan to the corner and sent his greetings to John, and to Mary, their daughter. 译文：他送苏珊到街口拐弯处，请她向约翰、玛丽和他们的女儿问好。改译：

他送苏珊到街口拐弯处，请她向约翰和他们的女儿玛丽问好。